1st essay - Can someone critque/edit/help me out

College Essays
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<p>I have drafted my first essay . it is very long but it has a lot of ideas and i feel it can be split into two essays ! . can some help me out </p>

<p>it is for the following prompts :-
Drexel university's - write about why you are interested in your choice of major or you may write on any subject you choose.</p>

<p>RPI's - Write about yourself in about 250 words </p>

<p>UIUC: In an essay of 300 words or less, choose one extracurricular activity, work experience, or community service project from the list you provided on the application and explain why you initially chose it, why you continued with it, and how you have benefited from it.</p>

<p>uMich : College of Engineering Please describe your interests and aspirations
in engineering. What experiences have influenced you? 250 words</p>

<p>Can someone help me out . i will PM you if you are interested in critiquing/editing/giving tips </p>

<p>thanks in advance</p>

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<p>bump … </p>

<p>can someone please help me out ?</p>

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<p>P.S. - it is Critique … </p>

<p>Any one ?</p>

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<p>PM with title/prompt</p>

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<p>Give me a PM, won’t promise to edit/proof but will critique</p>

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<p>Did you both get the message ?</p>

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<p>Ummm yea, three bloody times.</p>

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<p>I am really sorry DSI … my laptop is screwd .</p>

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<p>Hmm you obviously had not taken the time to proof-read yourself. Do that first and send the revised version to me.</p>

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<p>I have reduced it from a 1200 word essay . to a 900 word 1 … i just dont know which all parts to edit out . As My counselor does’nt speak or understand english … where as my english teacher is concernd … she is away for vacations … I need some one who can tell me which all parts are use less … </p>

<p>Can you help me out with this … as i am new to this college admissions process. </p>

<p>Bump and Thank you for your time</p>

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<p>Bump … any one … who can help me out</p>

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<p>sure ill read it. pm</p>

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<p>ill read it. pm please</p>

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<p>No replies yet ! … I have PMed u all … please reply . </p>

<p>DSI … I know its a lot of work . .cut can u help me out ? </p>

<p>all of u … BUMP</p>

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<p>ill help. pm me</p>

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<p>i’ll help. PM it over.</p>

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<p>BUMP … any1 ?</p>

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<p>bump…</p>

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<p>I will read and critique. PM me</p>

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<p>ok i’ll help.</p>