<p>Hi if anyone would like to read my essay and give me suggestions on how to shorten it, it would be greatly appreciated. Do you think this would be a good idea for the "other" option on the common app essay. I know this is poorly written and everything, and I'm attempting to try and add more at the end, but I just wanted to get people's opinions and what not....</p>
<p>Thanks- If you want to read it let me know and I'll PM you</p>