I figured since my grandmother’s death was not the main reason for my academic performance and since I did not want to sound like I am blaming the professor for failing the class, this is what i came up with and revised my draft.
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I recently received your email regarding academic dismissal and would like to respond and request reconsideration. I have been making efforts to resolve this and will include brief details of the particular challenges I had been dealing with.
I took on a 22 hour internship at a dental office to enhance my experience and build my resume. In the beginning of the quarter, I had no problems with adjusting to the work schedule in addition to the classes I was taking. I underestimated retaking Organic Chemistry because I knew what to expect from the material. I did not dedicate enough time on Calculus 142 because I was satisfied with how I did in Calculus 141. In the middle of the quarter, I realized my mindset was wrong. Nearing the end, I was struggling to catch up on the material I should have spent more time on in the beginning, as well as keeping up with the most recent lectures. I put more focus into my internship than on my academics.
I did not seek help when I knew I needed it and should have taken complete time off from work to prioritize my education. I did not access resources to help me academically. I understand that my academic performance no longer meets the university standards, with a cumulative overall GPA below a 2.0. However, I am willing to get back on track with the university. As of December 15, I took time off my internship to prioritize my academics. If given the chance to continue my education at Cal Poly, my academic improvement will consist of:
-Working with my advisor to create a plan to get back on track
-Going to office hours to improve my understanding of the material
-Prioritize academics and drop several activities until my performance is satisfactory
-Adding more study sessions and workshops to my schedule
-Dedicate weekend time to review lectures, test my understanding, read ahead and get started on papers
I am asking for a second chance to prove that I can succeed at Cal Poly Pomona. In the past, I did not take the time to evaluate what went wrong in how I approached the two quarters I demonstrated poor academic performance in. For Winter Quarter 2016, I am ready to take action and commit to my academics. I am confident that I can succeed and get back on track by taking the actions I have listed.
Thank you very much for taking the time to consider my request.
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