Admissions Essay

College Essays
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<p>Hi everyone, this is the rough draft of my admissions essay to BU. Is it too bland?
Please edit/comment!!</p>

<p>In no more than 250 words, please tell us why BU is a good fit for you and what specifically has led you to apply for admission.</p>

<p>There are a myriad of reasons why I believe Boston University is the best fit for me. For my entire life I attended an all-girls ultra-Orthodox Jewish private school. The summer after I graduated from this high school I enrolled in a couple classes at a community college. This was my first time ever really being exposed to people who come from a dissimilar background than I, yet I was pleasantly surprised by the eager questions I received. BU is a diverse and multi-cultural environment where I feel I can branch out and learn about the infinite amount of religious backgrounds and cultures that I never had the chance to learn about before. Additionally, BU offers an intense and varied academic curriculum, a factor I specifically looked for – coming from a high school with a dual Judaic and secular curriculum. Though I am unsure of my area of study, BU offers all of the majors I am interested in, including English, Film & Television with Specialization in Film, and Linguistics. In addition to offering me a remarkable education, BU is located in one of the prime cities for college students. I feel that Boston’s rich history and many historical landmarks can contribute immensely to my education and college experience. Lastly, though BU is an extremely diverse university, it also has a vibrant Hillel and Jewish community, and for that reason I think it is the perfect place for me to learn about and be exposed to other cultures while still remaining an involved and proud member of my own religious community.</p>

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<p>The problem with this essay is that you are not really giving any specifics. Most colleges offer a “diverse and multi cultural environment”, “a varied academic curriculum”, “a remarkable education” and many are in Boston. Get to the specifics. Mention professors you’d like to work with and opportunities not available anywhere else. Also, one of the most important things with these essays is making the connection between you and the college. Notice the first part of the question, please tell us why BU is a good fit for YOU. The university knows that they have great resources so there is no need to tell them that. What they don’t know is how you could use those resources effectively. Again get to the specifics. Don’t tell them that they have amazing classes, rather tell them the unique ones you would want to take part of and what bring to those classes. This essay is an opportunity for you to tell the university why you would be a good fit for the college. Take it! And remember it takes two to make a match so don’t forget to talk about what you can bring to the table as well.</p>