Advices for H essay please

Colleges & Universities A-Z Harvard University
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<p>There are two essays I have written:
1. the growth of passion in an activity
2. my thoughts during the same activity <-this one is rather bizarre</p>

<p>The 1st one is neat, but I'm not sure if it conveys my voice.
The 2nd is very odd, but it conveys my voice. It lacks a momentum to arouse the reader's feeling, though.</p>

<p>Please, please help me choose the essay, and edit the 2nd essay. Help me build the momentum.</p>

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<p>You can PM them over, and I can take a look.</p>

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<p>i’ll read them. PM them over</p>

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<p>me too, also pm it over</p>

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<p>Bump .</p>

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<p>I’ll give 'em a read as well!</p>

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<p>PM me and I’ll take a look</p>

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<p>PM if you wish</p>

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<p>Will read for food.</p>

<p>But for you? Will read for free.</p>