Another "grade my essay"

[globe_trotter]

<p>If you wouldn't mind, read my essay and offer some suggestions...besides my horrendous handwriting and awful spelling. </p>

<p>This was the May 2009 prompt: Should we pay more attention to people who are older and more experienced than we are?</p>

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<p>Thanks.</p>