Anybody up to read my commonapp essay?

Applying to College
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<p>I completely re-wrote my common application essay after being deferred by Yale SCEA.
I decided to take a somewhat more radical/creative? approach this time around, but I'm not sure whether I'm on the right track at the moment.</p>

<p>If you guys have 10 minutes to spare, could you read my essay and give me feedback/criticism on how to improve it? Or if you think it's bad, then just please honestly tell me so I can scrap this idea before spending too much time on it.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>I would be glad to, PM it over! I’m 2014, but I’m not diligent enough to overhaul my own commonapp essay, so I won’t steal your ideas or anything haha.
In return, would you mind looking at my Caltech supplement essay? It’s sort of extremely informal… which could be okay just because it’s Caltech or could make me look completely immature. So uhm yeah. If you have time. :)</p>

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<p>I will give it a read, give you some feedback, and then maybe you can check mine out. Send me a PM</p>

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<p>buuuuuuump</p>

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<p>I will read it, if you’re willing to read one of mine in exchange. I’m appling RD to Rice but procrastinating</p>

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<p>I’ll read it, PM it over.</p>