Anybody want to critique my essay?

[phroz3n]

<p>Any kind souls out there who would like to critique my main essay for the CommonApp? All suggestions are welcome.</p>

[ucsbcencalstud]

<p>Hey I sure will. Just PM me.</p>

[superlyduper]

<p>i'll help you out.</p>

[tempest_in_a_teacup]

<p>Me. Just PM Soon !</p>