Anybody willing to look over a rough draft commonapp (not current student)

College Essays
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<p>This is a very rough draft, and I'm mainly looking for feedback on whether this is a unique/good essay and says enough about me as an applicant. I would prefer a parent or someone w/app experience, as I don't want to risk plagiarism. Any feedback appreciated. It's prompt 1, if that matters. Thanks.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it! PM me</p>

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<p>I did end up finding people to read it, but thanks for the offer.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it! PM me</p>