anyone care to read over my essay?

<p>i just finished my first essay and i would like someone to give me feedback on it, greatly appreciated. thank you. post here and ill pm you.</p>

<p>i know i just joined but its because i just heard about this site and i could use some critique. thank you. post here and ill message it to you</p>

<p>anybodyyy??? please could really use some help and a 2nd set of eyes</p>