<p>Prompt: Should all people's opinions be valued equally, or should only informed opinions be taken seriously?</p>
<p>As humans, we think and view things differently because of our varying experiences and knowledge. Some people have lived in such a way that their ideas are blunt and weak, while others think and share well-thought-out, informed opinions. Therefore, it is essential that we choose and take serious informed opinions only, as proved in various ways including my personal experience.</p>
<p>Our school has a monthly program called IPE which is provides a way in which students can change the school to a better place of education by writing letters of advice to the headmaster. These number or letters range from a hundred to two hundred. Not surprisingly, the headmaster would not read all the letters; however, there are some letters from specific students whom he always reads. These are students who were always promising in their advice and gave a persuasive view of their point. This emphasizes the importance of only considering informed opinions. This would mean that it would take time for new people to get a good image of themselves to others so that their opinions would be considered as different from others. In the end, the headmaster seemed that he didnt bother to waste time reading all the normal views of the rest of the students because they werent worthy of considering.</p>
<p>However, it is also important not to ignore and belittle the opinions of the young children and youth. Many consider everything they say as childish and immature. While this might be partially true, some might come up with extraordinary opinions as evidenced by a true story extracted from The Arabian Nights King Schahriar and his brother. In a society where the sultan has oppressed the women and has caused them into intense fear because of his barbaric actions; he used to marry a virgin women every night and kill her by the morning, a beautiful, cunning young girl named Scheherazade had enough brevity and courage to save the girls and mothers of her land from the awful fate that hang over them. She came up with the plan of becoming the Sultans wife and pleaded her father with her obstinacy and, eventually; her plan rendered successful. She was able to change the sultans attitude and mold him into a different person.</p>
<p>In short, after getting to know people from their opinions, only those with informed opinions should be considered while the others should just be listened to and not ignored, for they might have the potential to change.</p>
<p>Thank you</p>
<p>On my second time reading the essay, I feel that the first example isn’t much convincing for some reason. I also feel that I didn’t elaborate on my second example so that the reader would identify my point with me.</p>
<p>I want to mention that I have always used personal examples on all my previous SAT essays; however, on this one’s second example I used a story from the anthology I take at school. Surprisingly, writing the second example was much easier and the ideas were flowing although I am not sure whether others would understand it as I do unless they have previously read this story.</p>
<p>So please critique my essay, please!</p>
<p>Well, I think that your first example is OK but your SECOND one is not so convincing. It gives the reader trouble to reread your essay to understand since normally SAT writers usually take a clear stand- whether they agree or disagree. I think you can use the example of the boy who calls the wolf for the argument that uninformed information can sometimes be misleading… </p>
<p>It is just my own style ( and many other people) to take a very clear stand. Hope my advice help :)</p>
<p>Thank you xholyknight! I appreciate your advice?
Don’t want to make a separate thread so, can some also take a look at my second essay?</p>
<p>Prompt: Is the world changing for the better?</p>
<p>Sure, the world is becoming better for many people. This modern age has made many aspects of life such as transport, education and health easier to access and convenient. However, there are myriad negative yields because of these advancements in technology.</p>
<p>First and foremost, many people have lost jobs because their work has been replaced my machinery. Farmer no longer need to employ people for labor. Of course, it’s not like this would make farmers worried; this is actually an advantage for them but in the expense of thousands of people. According to the World Health Organization (WHO), 95% of farmers around the world have lost their jobs by 2004 and 80% of these people have become underemployed and unemployed since then. What does this mean? Poverty would prevail on these people and their families; this is especially the case in many countries in Africa and India. This would lead to a vast spread of uncontrollable diseases and ignorance because these people would not be able to pay for their necessity needs of food, education and health care. Who is to blame? Technology. All these assert the fact that the world is, behind the scene, exacerbating.</p>
<p>Secondly, the technology that has made education easier and accessible has, itself, rendered people to become indolent. Students all over the world might try to copy-paste answers to homework from online. They no longer ponder over and think of a way to improve. This laziness has caused students to play and waste time throughout high school and finally in their final exams, many fail drastically. For instance, my neighbor friend Tyler has always been fixated over Facebook. I used to wonder whether he was a genius or a fool who didn’t care much about his studies. I asked him about his performances in school and were pretty impressive. Just a month before, after Tyler had entered his final GCSE exams and was waiting for his results, he and his parents were shocked of his ‘C’ grade. He was always an A student? What happened? It’s just that he was a victim of one the cons of technology. The world is indeed not getting better as technology promises.</p>
<p>In short, along with the myriad pros of technology come tones of cons. I cannot stress enough exactly all the problem that technology has brought but I believe that with this rate the world is not becoming better but worse. This is all thanks to technology.</p>
<p>This last essays prompt seems more like the questions we do in the English in school. However, most of the SAT prompts are more general and distant and can not be supported with mere reasoning; I need to give life literary and historical examples.</p>
<p>Anybody else? Please critique and grade my essay!</p>
<p>With 377 viewers of this thread, I expected more than just one reply. </p>
<p>Please, anyone! critique my essay.</p>
<p>I think you should try to vary your vocab a little, since you use words like myriad, technology or better many times. You have clear structure, well organized example and easy to understand essay, but you have a few comma splice sentences and grammar errors :)</p>
<p>Thanks you very much again xholyknight I really appreciate the time you gave in reading my essay and commenting on it.</p>
<p>Btw, what does ‘bump,bump…’ mean. I have seen it in several threads.</p>
<p>Sorry, but anyone else? Some more analysis of my essay would much appreciated!</p>