Anyone wanna read my essay?

Applying to College
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<p>Hey,</p>

<p>I just wrote my essay and i'd like some feedback. Just leave a post if you want to take a look at it. BTW, its about shoes.</p>

<p>Thanks</p>

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<p>Anyone? </p>

<p>I need some help to see if i'm on the right track.</p>

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<p>sure, i'll read your essay. just PM it to me and i'll see if i can help!</p>

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<p>BTW, here are my stats:</p>

<p>SAT (first try):</p>

<p>Reading: 720
Math: 630
Writing: 540</p>

<p>ACT (again, first try): 29</p>

<p>I intend to retake in October to raise my writing (and possibly math) scores.</p>

<p>GPA: 3.803 unweighted, our school doesn't weight GPAs or rank.</p>

<p>ECs:
Freshman football
Freshman/sophomore lacrosse
(Not active) member of FCCLA (future leaders) and SADD (two years)
Mission trip to Arizona through my church
Mission trip to Mexico through my church
Worked for PIRGIM (Public Interest Research Group In Michigan), and evironmental organization
Volunteering twice a week @ two hours a time at U of M hospital</p>

<p>APs:
US History: 4
Government: expecting a 5
Literature and Comp: Self studied, probably no less than a 2
Going to take AP English Lit next year, and i plan to self study Psych and Spanish (took it for 4 years, nearly fluent)</p>

<p>I plan to take some subject tests in the fall too.</p>

<p>Schools I'm looking at:
NYU
UofM
Pepperdine
UC Santa Barbara
Boston College
Tufts
Fordham
Columbia (clearly a reach)</p>

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<p>sure PM it to me</p>

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<p>PM me, I'm bored.</p>

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<p>PM me if you still want advice/critique.</p>

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<p>PM me too.</p>

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<p>go ahead and PM me</p>

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<p>Go ahead and PM me whenever you're on CC next.</p>

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<p>I love shoes! </p>

<p>ok, only track shoes and runnings, but I still want to see your essay</p>

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<p>Thanks for everyone's help so far. PM me if anyone else wants to take a look at it.</p>

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<p>hornet, I've read your essay but I haven't had time to make comments for you. I'll get back to you asap with what I think, although you'll probably want to take the advice of these other CCers over me.</p>

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<p>I'll read it.</p>

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<p>I'll edit it grammatically. That's pretty much all I'm good for anyway.</p>

<p>PM it over.</p>

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<p>sure pm it.</p>

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<p>tell me if ne1 wants to read mine (sorry to hijack ;))</p>

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<p>Why did you stop football and lacrosse? </p>

<p>Anyways, I could tell you were an athlete judging by your ACT score and your SAT writing score. There seems to be a trend between the two, ACT is usually easier for athletes for some reason.</p>

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<p>I actually stopped because i'm not very athletic. </p>

<p>I didn't know there was a correlation between the ACT and SAT writing with athletes. It makes sense though, i think Jordan aced the ACT ;-).</p>

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<p>i would love to read your essay!</p>