Anyone want to critique my Common App Essay?

College Essays
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<p>Would anyone like to critique my Common App Essay? It would be greatly appreciated!</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>Sure, PM me</p>

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<p>PM’d, anyone else?</p>

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<p>I’ll read it</p>

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<p>I’ll read it</p>

<p>Sent from my HTC Glacier using CC App</p>

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<p>Sure pm it</p>

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<p>Sure…I’ll take a look at it</p>