Anyone want to give me feedback on my risky UC essay?

<p>Yeah... I already submitted it but a couple of my friends said that it's risky, so I want to see what you guys think. A little feedback (any amount is good) will be greatly appreciated.</p>

<p>And to those who will definitely ask, I'm letting people read this after I've submitted it so I won't have to worry about anyone stealing it (I'm using it only for the UCs). </p>

<p>PM me or post below and I'll PM it to you.</p>

<p>i’ll read it. pm it it overr</p>

<p>I’ll read it.</p>

<p>Pm it to me…</p>

<p>i’ll read it</p>