Anyone want to read and critique my page 217/300 essay?

Colleges and Universities A-Z University of Pennsylvania
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<p>I think it was well written, but honestly it lacked subsatcne. I did something unique with it though, any readers?</p>

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<p>anyone? bumppppp</p>

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<p>I can. My father went to UPenn so I can ask him, too.
Is it okay if you PM it to me and then I send it back to you on Word (with TrackChanges)?
Thanks :P</p>

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<p>sure thnaks stoompy! Sent.</p>

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<p>im applying RD but i can look at it if you want.</p>

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<p>sure sent azn</p>

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<p>ill read it! i finally sent in my app like 2 hours ago :) my 217 pger is bangin hot lol</p>

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<p>I'll read it. I'm applying for transfer, but I already finished all my essays.</p>

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<p>feel free to PM.</p>

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<p>i'd like to read it =)
i don't think i'm doing the pg217 haha
see if it's really 'truly' optional</p>

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<p>Ive sent my app in; I'll give it a read if you want.</p>

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<p>i'll have a look
i have many friends in penn and they'll give u some insights, too</p>

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<p>Send it over. I will critique it conceptually- tell you what works and what doesn't.</p>

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<p>not good -_-</p>

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<p>i could look it over, if you want. i'd be more than happy to!</p>

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<p>I'd like to read it as well. I', planning on transferring next year.</p>

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<p>sure, pm it to me.</p>

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<p>pm me if you want another critique. thanks.</p>

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<p>I'd love to help! Send me a PM =)</p>

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<p>sure! i've already submitted my penn app. PM me! :)</p>