<p>sure10char</p>
<p>pm it to me if you want another critique. i can have my friend at penn critique it too.</p>
<p>I'll be more than happy to read it. My friends are applying to it, and they knowing me to be the reading nerd, all sent their essays to me for me to proofread.</p>
<p>I'll be more than happy to send you advice if you even need it to begin with. :)</p>
<p>sure, pm me</p>