anyone want to read my essay..

Applying to College Common and Coalition Application
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<p>Anyone care to read my common app essay? I dont think it is very good and I am thinking of starting over.. but I want some comments before I start all over. I think my problem is that I am telling too much and need to show more, but maybe not. Any help would be awesome! By the way, it is the first prompt about an extra curricular that has changed you.</p>

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<p>PM it to me.</p>

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<p>just did. thanks!</p>

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<p>PM it to me pls</p>

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<p>I can definitely look over it - PM me!</p>

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<p>I would love to take a look at it</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look at it.</p>

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<p>I would love to have a look at it :)</p>

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<p>sure! pm me</p>

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<p>I’ll give it a look, too.</p>

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<p>I would love to take a look at it.</p>

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<p>I’ll give it a look,.</p>

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<p>PM to me too! i’ll look</p>

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<p>PM it to me ill take a look</p>

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<p>I’ll take a look!</p>

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<p>PM me I’ll read it :D</p>

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<p>I definitely can! (:</p>

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<p>I’d happy to help:)</p>

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<p>PM it to me, i’ll read it :)</p>

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<p>pm me if you need some help! :)</p>