<p>its a common app essay i worked very very hard on. i would appreciate critique.</p>
<p>anybody is welcome just dont steal it or use pieces of it lol.</p>
<p>anyone?</p>
<p>pm it over</p>
<p>sounds really powerful, the beggar paragraph = great imagery, himalaya paragraph = very interesting too. You had a strong message and tied it in with your aspirations smoothly..
i like how you contrasted your utopian memories of india with some post-apocalyptic present state... </p>
<p>i would recommend (as far as i know from a college essay workshop i went to) to say more about your future, like if your going to be doctor, you'd go to india and so and so...a little more about you...basically what I, i dunno bout other people, got from the essay is that you are nostalgic, disappointed, determined...unless thats what your going in which case, sick.</p>
<p>btw im from chennai too lol</p>
<p>PM it to me too :)</p>
<p>i'd like to read it too</p>
<p>wow thanks enigmanaut, i appreciate teh kind words and critique. thnx as well to others reading</p>