Anyone want to read my intro

College Essays
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<p>So I need help with my intro.
I feel its too casual. Anyone want to read it and give their input</p>

<p>also is it bad to be too casual in the essay</p>

<p>I using promt #2 for the UC personal statement</p>

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<p>message it to me.</p>

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<p>anyone else</p>

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<p>bump…</p>

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<p>in dire need please</p>

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<p>yeah. message it.</p>

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<p>sure, i’ll read it too</p>

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<p>anyone else</p>

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<p>I’ll read it</p>