Anyone willing to critique SOP intro?

<p>Private message me if you're willing! Thanks a bunch guys!</p>

<p>Statement of purpose introduction for International Studies. Here is the rubric.</p>

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<li>reasons for pursuing graduate study,</li>
<li>program you hope to follow at X university</li>
<li>strengths/weaknesses of your preparation for graduate study</li>
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