Anyone willing to give feedback on my Common App essay?

I’m applying early decision to Washington University in St. Louis and regular decision to many others. I have finished my first draft of my common app essay and would like opinions from non-biased people. Anyone willing to read it over please respond. Thank you :)>- :slight_smile:

lol basically everyone has some bias or another; but if you want to send me your essay I’m willing to look over it