anyone willing to look @ my essay on an extracurricular activity?

<p>the prompt is to describe the value of an extracurricular activity, was wondering if i could PM this to someone to get some legit impact on it? the thing is, i'm not exactly sure what colleges want. are they looking for a thrilling, scintillating narrative that describes a scene in time from a particular activity which shows its value? or are they looking for something like an expository statement about the value of this activity and my involvement in it -- relatively cut and professional, simple, and to-the-point without many bonus points for thrill factor?</p>

<p>if some people can look over this for me and give me some pointers, i'd appreciate it a lot. thanks.</p>

<p>I’ll read it and give comments a day or two at the latest.</p>

<p>Colleges, from what I’ve heard, would prefer a narrative. They always say “show vs. tell” and this is a great opportunity to do so. You want to imply the following things, if possible, within your narrative: why you do the EC, what you do for it, and how you and others benefit.</p>

<p>For example: my essay was about my thoughts heading into and after my final putt in my final golf tournament. It was implied that I loved the game and that I dedicated a ton of time to it. I could have just written a dry statement saying the same thing, but top colleges (again, from what I’ve heard) don’t want to see cookie-cutter stuff. </p>

<p>PM me if you still want help.</p>

<p>PM me your essay!</p>

<p>pm it to me.</p>

<p>I would love to read it! PM it to me?</p>

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<p>i like to read and comment your essay! PM me please!</p>

<p>pm me it ill read it over</p>

<p>Please PM me, thanks!</p>

<p>PM me please. I would really like to read them and give you some comments, but you should realize that I am not a professional for the essay thing…</p>

<p>I’ll read it and give u feedback</p>

<p>ill do it :]</p>

<p>I still want it; I’ll comment too.</p>