Anyone willing to read my Common App essay?

College Essays
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I basically rewrote it three times already, but it still feels like it needs work. It’s about my love of comedy. Thanks to anyone willing to read it; I’ll PM you.

Specific questions I have for any readers:

  1. Do I need the first paragraph at all / is the essay too long?
  2. Is the tone too casual, too scholarly, or somewhere in-between?
  3. I originally wrote it for the "problem-solving" prompt, but now I feel like it perhaps fits the "background/interest" prompt better. Thoughts?
  4. Is the last paragraph too repetitive?
  5. Do I come off as self-confident or annoying? If not, what DO I come off as?
  6. Does it make you want to get to know me better? What DO you know about me after reading it?

Thanks again :slight_smile:

P.S. I’ve sort of become paranoid thanks to the pinned posts in this section so please don’t get upset if I decide not to send you mine after looking at your profile. Just tryna keep safe, and all that!

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I’m a bored rising senior with nothing to do, so I’ll read it if you want me too :stuck_out_tongue:

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I’ll read it! College sophomore with a history of editing essays, if you want to check :wink:

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Of course, it just get my offers!

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I can take a look at it!

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I would love to read it!

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@pontmercy I will read it!

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I’ll read it as well!! ;D

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I would love to read it! :slight_smile:

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I’ll read it!

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Ill read it

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pm me, ill read it :smiley:

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I will