Anyone willing to read my UPENN supplement essay?

<p>Basically the title says it all. I just want some critical feedback.</p>

<p>I’ll take a look. I applied to Penn ED.</p>

<p>thanks! I pmed it to you. It’s more of just getting my ideas down on paper, but I want to see if I’m on the right track</p>

<p>I just caught a typo from copy and pasting it in. “o e” is supposed to be “one” sorry bout that</p>