AP World History FRQs

<p>I wanted to get a general opinion on how others here in CC are preparing for the APWH free-response questions. What I'm doing right now is practicing writing some essays out of released FRQ packets from the AP Central website. My current problems include taking too long to organize the information in my head, although I consider that irrelevant (for right now, since I know what I have to focus on to improve). My main concern is that I have no one to grade my essays and offer critiques. (My teacher isn't a good option since he's taught us nothing all year.)</p>

<p>Anyways, in addition to sharing some tips here, I was wondering if anyone wouldn't mind responding to my essays? If you wouldn't mind helping me, let me know and I'll post a few of my essays!</p>

<p>I’ll help, if you do the same for my APUSH essays?</p>

<p>Sure. I haven’t taken APUSH (I will next year), but I’ll grade your DBQ essays using the criteria, as long as you give them to me.</p>

<p>Here are just a few I’ve written…</p>

<p>Change-over-time and Continuity (from the 2010 Princeton Review guide Practice Exam 1):</p>

<p>"Discuss how technological changes since 1750 have had an impact on family structure in one of the following nations. Be sure to include continuities as well as changes.</p>

<ul>
<li>China</li>
<li>Japan</li>
<li>India</li>
<li>Great Britain"</li>
</ul>

<p>The average family structure of Great Britain was impacted in numerous ways as a result of the technological innovations introduced from 1750 onward. The introduction of the cotton gin and especially the steam engine began to shift family life more from the home to the factories as urbanization reached its peak. Technology did not, however, change the roles of the individuals of the family. Nevertheless, to better understand these impacts, it is important to consider how the family structure in Great Britain was originally like.</p>

<p>In the time period spanning from 1750 to the start of the Industrial Revolution, family life and structure was centered around rural conditions. Families often lived and worked in small farms. The father was in task of working and supporting the family, while the mother was left to raise the children. The roles of both father and mother was clearly defined in this time period, as they each had their own respective tasks.</p>

<p>The Industrial Revolution of the 1800’s introduced new technologies that greatly changed family structure. As factories were being built after the introduction of the steam engine, urbanization led to families leaving their farms and moving to cities where they could earn more money. Eli Whitney’s cotton gin lessened the need of the domestic system, which also led to increased urbanization. Once families moved to the cities, women and children were expected to work at a local factory. Harsh working conditions and long working hours meant that the family was often separated. Sometimes, women and children would even live in a boardinghouse provided by the factory, further changing the original family structure. However, women and children could now pursuit their own interests, something which they could not do before. Indeed, the technological innovations that led to the Industrial Revolution centered family structure around working independently in factories instead of working together in the farms.</p>

<p>While technological innovations after 1750 may have affected how often the family saw each other, etc., they did not affect each member’s role in the family structure. The father still remained head of the house. Women were denied certain privileges, such as voting rights, until the 1900’s. Only the son could receive a formal education while daughters were expected to support the house. Women and children’s roles did not largely change until the mid-twentieth century, but the cause was more a need for employment during the World Wars moreso than technological changes.</p>

<p>Technological changes since the 1750’s impacted family structure by shifting the focus of the family to working in the factories. The individual roles of each member did not change as a result of technological changes, mainly because women still treated as being inferior to men.</p>

<p>It was a good discussion of how the European nuclear family changed due to technology, but do you need to supply specific evidence in your essays? Like specific examples? We do in APUSH. Anyways, you had three well-developed paragraphs, there were just minor grammar errors but I don’t think those count for much. It evaluated cause and effect and family roles, so I’m pretty sure it would get a nice grade.
Oh and you completely answered the question which is a big point-scorer, like you evaluated continuities as well as changes.</p>

<p>Here’s one of my essays-</p>

<p>Analyze the impact the Eisenhower administration had on the TWO of the following issues during his presidency:</p>

<p>Vietnam Conflict
Civil Rights’
US-Soviet Relations’</p>

<p>President Dwight Eisenhower came into office during the post-war era, when the United States was entering an arms race with the Soviet Union. Possession of nuclear weapons and the threat of communism created a tense and dangerous situation that called for careful action from the president. Meanwhile, back at home, the persisting problem of minority - mainly black - discrimination was becoming too large to ignore. Complete desegregation was a necessary step, but also posed a prickly situation, especially in the south. Although Eisenhower dealt with both issues to the best of his abilities, widely differing results came of his actions. President Eisenhower worsened relations with the Soviet Union in his various attempts at negotiating favorable deals with the nation, and contributed greatly to the improvement of civil rights due to his unwavering determination and bold steps toward complete equality.</p>

<pre><code> The US-Soviet relations during the Eisenhower administration took a backwards turn as Eisenhower fought for more favorable conditions for the United States. The launching of the Russian Sputnik resulted in widespread panic for the Americans as they contemplated what the next step would be for the communist country. Eisenhower refused to get caught up in the panic, however, and took calm, careful actions to end the arms race. Although overall, his actions only worsened the relationship with the Soviet Union, Eisenhower at the very least managed to keep the United States out of a full, military-engaged war for another presidential term. Back at the home front, civil rights took a big leap towards achieving it’s final goal, and steps were taken to ensure protection for the minorities in the future.

Hopes of a more flexible and less radical Soviet Union rose when Joseph Stalin, former communist leader, died in March of 1953. That same year, President Eisenhower gave a speech in which he suggested the Soviet Union should put a halt to their attempts at territorial and influential expansion, and in return they would receive American goodwill and cooperation. This speech gained a cold response from Stalin’s successor, Georgi Malenkov, and Eisenhower was unable to meet with him until 1955. During this Geneva summit meeting of 1955, Eisenhower proposed an “Open Skies” agreement, where both sides provided the other with full descriptions of all their military facilities, and even suggested aerial inspections to certify the information was correct. This proposal would actually benefit the U.S. far more than the Soviets, as only the former would really be gaining any new and useful information. Predictably, the outraged Soviets rejected the proposal, and a disappointed Eisenhower set his goals for the next meeting in 1959, in which the two nations would discuss an end to the arms race. The meetings started out well enough; Soviet Premier Krushchev agreed to meet again in Paris the following year. However, US-Soviet relations pulled to a deadly halt when a US spy plane, called the U2, was found flying over Russia. Eisenhower denied all charges and was soon found to be lying, and as a result relations with the Soviet Union were overall worsened during the Eisenhower administration.

On a more positive note, civil rights were greatly improved during the Eisenhower administration; the president determined to end all segregation in Washington, DC from his first day in office. Similarly, President Eisenhower completed what President Truman had set out to do with the issue of Executive Order 9981, and by October of 1954, all units in the army had been desegregated. When an all-white high school in Arkansas openly defied a federal court order to integrate, Eisenhower sent elements of the 101st Airborne Division to carry out the mandate. Although this act was met with nation-wide resentment, it established that segregation would no longer be tolerated. Eisenhower, aware of the reality of racial intolerance that he had experienced during his military days, strove to abolish the restrictive mentality and pushed the Civil Rights Act of 1957 through Congress. Although it was greatly modified into a much weaker law than he had intended, this was one of Eisenhower’s greatest contributions to the civil rights movement. Today he is admired for meeting with black civil rights leaders such as Martin Luther King, Jr., Roy Wilkins, and Lester B. Granger. Eisenhower’s most lasting action to bring about racial equality in his country were his federal and judicial appointments. Appointed by Eisenhower, Earl Warren served as Chief Justice of the Supreme Court and is responsible for the Brown v. Board of Topeka decision, which ended the “Separate but Equal” concept that was a key contributor to segregation. Eisenhower appointed only federal judges solidly committed to equal rights, and in doing so ensured that the civil rights movement would carry on long after his presidency.

The Eisenhower administration marked an effort to achieve a few very important goals, some that had been an objective for centuries and some which were as new as the technology that produced them. U.S.-Soviet relations worsened during this time, but minorities achieved greater rights and the assurance that better days
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<p>I have to say that your essay was very well written! Your thesis was explicitly stated and was supported by appropriate historical evidence. I don’t really have much else to say, as I’m not familiar with the APUSH format, but assuming the guidelines are somewhat like the APWH ones, I’d give this at least a 7 for having an explicit thesis and making good use of historical evidence for analysis of the topics.</p>

<p>Here is a Change-over-time/Continuity essay that I wrote based on the prompt for the 2007 FRQ, if anyone could take a look at it please.</p>

<p>"Analyze major changes and continuities in the formation of national identities in ONE of the regions listed below from 1914 to the present. Be sure to include evidence from specific countries in the region selected.</p>

<p>Middle East
Southeast Asia
Sub-Saharan Africa"</p>

<p>The formation of national identities in the Middle East differed greatly during the period from 1914 to the present. The spread of Western culture in the Middle East contrasted with local customs, and nations impacted either had the option of adopting Western culture or rejecting it. Westernization had a major impact on the region due to ongoing revolutions that challenged the original laws and customs set in place. Among the more influential Middle East countries of the period, Turkey embraced Westernization while Iran largely rejected it after the Iranian Revolution. To better understand the formation of national identities in the Middle East, it is necessary to analyze what the region’s overall identity was like before 1914 and shortly after.</p>

<p>The Middle East was largely based on Muslim customs due to both the Ottoman Empire and Safavid Empire’s influence since the fifteenth and sixteenth centuries. However, both empires faced decline as time progressed, although European countries tried to keep the Ottoman Empire going in an attempt to prevent Russian expansion. While the overall region of the Middle East remained Muslim, Islam as a whole began losing its role in government and traditional customs.</p>

<p>After the Ottoman Empire’s fall in the aftermath of World War I and the establishment of Turkey, Ataturk overthrew the sultan and became president. Ataturk adopted Western traditions by enforcing Western-style dress and setting up a parliamentary-based system of government. Indeed, Ataturk rejected the Middle East’s mainly Muslim traditions and established secular traditions in its place, mainly because he was persistent in enforcing change. While the population of Turkey is mainly Muslim to this day, they have a national identity that is more like modern-day European countries.</p>

<p>Iran, another influential country in the Middle East, eventually ended up with a national identity based on Shia traditions. Originally, Iran adopted a Western culture, like Turkey, under the Shah, who gave increased rights to Muslim women and eliminated restrictions on clothing. However, the Iranian people, especially the Islamic fundamentalists, became resentful of the growing Western influence in the country. Under Ayatollah Khomeini, the Iranian people overthrew the Shah in what is known as the Iranian Revolution. Ayatollah quickly prohibited Western-style dress by enforcing veiling for women while in public and making the Qu’ran the basis of civil law. After Ayatollah’s death, Iran continued to be a struggle between the Islamic fundamentalists and the people who wanted Western-reform. Although there may be disagreement about the national identity of the country, Iran kept to the Muslim traditions that originally defined the Middle East because of the fundamentalists’ growing resentment of Western-culture in Iran.</p>

<p>Certainly, the introduction and progress of Westernization caused the formation of different national identities in the Middle East, only some of which kept to the original Muslim traditions of the region that were held by the Ottoman and Safavid empires. Turkey chose to adopt Western culture as a result of Ataturk’s persistence on reform while Iran rejected Western culture, in turn sticking with original Muslim culture, under the persistence of Ayatollah Khomeini and the Islamic fundamentalists.</p>

<p>I would give the essay that you have provided an 8. Very nice job of the organization of your thesis, I think that it was expertly written. The only weak point that i gave you was in the Basic Core because I did not see an abundance of analyzation of the process of how things changed. Also the only reason why I did not give you the other point for the Expanded Core was due to there not being connections to the events and ideas in a particularly imaginative way.</p>

<p>Truely though this is an Exemplary essay.</p>