<p>I am appealing to a college and I have recently written my letter to give. This is it with the appropriate words censored due to privacy:</p>
<p>Dear Board of Admissions,</p>
<p>My name is _____ ________, and I have been truly honored to have been considered into your school by your staff. [School] has been the one and only school occupying my mind as I awaited decision status these previous months; sadly, as I checked, I was enlightened of my denial.</p>
<p>Admittedly, I chose the wrong route at the beginning of my high school career because of a steady case of depression and simply having no hope for my future. I was settled on receiving a general diploma for high school and doing nothing afterwards. However, my thoughts quickly took a turn for the better with help and prayer, and by the start of my 11th grade year, I had decided I was going to live my life to its fullest potential. After talking with my guidance counselor, I realized I could cram all the classes I would need into my last years to receive my advanced diploma. This included all the courses I had neglected to take at the beginning of high school: algebra II, geometry, chemistry, and other advanced classes. My determination no longer diminished like it had before, just as it does not now. That is why I could proudly say I have had outlasting honor this year with a GPA of 4.1, and hold the highest grades in my Chemistry Honors and my Advanced Placement English courses. I taught myself that it is never too late to give yourself a future, and that is what I continue to work hard for.</p>
<p>With all of this, it took hard work and dedication to pull through; I had never felt more accomplished in my life, and I don't want to stop now. As a result of waiting to take the core classes, I did not do very well in the fall SAT. I regret these decisions, but I have done everything possible to fix my past mistakes. If I were to attend a college such as yours, I know I would excel and benefit greatly.</p>
<p>Beyond my academics, I have been a member to several clubs and included myself into a number of services to help my community, both inside my school and out. I participated in the Foreign Language Honor Society, Family, Career and Community Leaders of America, and the Tri-M Music Honor Society for a number of my high school years. Outside of my educational career I hold membership of the Human Rights Campaign. I am a partner of the ASPCA and I help provide a service to animals wrongfully done and needing of adoption. I also devote my time to my local church, teaching young children biblical lessons, and going under my minister to help aid the church in any way. </p>
<p>As well as my grades that have taken a dramatic improvement, I have not ceased in preparing myself for what I plan to major in. I also have had the honor to have won a national choir award and have learned seven years of an instrument all in my senior year. I am currently first chair, with this being my first year. Just recently I have been named a main character for the theater in my town. I have starred in many theatrical productions, but my greatest accomplishment is the musical that I have written and produced myself, that of which is being brought back due to a large popular demand. I would make a great partner with the other talented individuals in your new and improved theater program. It is my true passion ever since I was a child and I would not let my fellow students of [School] down.</p>
<p>Unfortunately, I was not able to include this information in my application because it did not fit properly in any of the categories; I feel that through the application I did not show what makes up entirely who I am, and what I could offer to you, one of the best schools in the country. </p>
<p>If I were admitted into your university, I would make a difference. Not just with my grades or natural talents, but I would make a difference in showing the world that one girl who thought she could be nothing can end up to be a woman presenting herself with honors in the best school in Virginia. All I ask is that you reconsider me just once more. I am willing to do whatever it takes for just one more look over my application. I will take what I learn from your school and bring it back to my community. I will respectfully honor your decision. I will not let you down, just as I promised not to let myself down. I want nothing more to be a [insert mascot name here], for that is the title that fits with my identity.</p>
<p>Thank you,</p>
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<p>Could I have some suggestions and opinions on this? Thank you!</p>