<p>Hey...now the admission process is FINALLY over... please post your college application essays here to help future applicants</p>
<p>Thanks greatly</p>
<p>I'm sorry but this is absurd and I have to comment. Application essays are PERSONAL statements. It's fine to ask people to edit them, but not to feed you essays for you to mimic. The college is assuming that it is YOUR work and when you sign your name to it, that is what you are telling them. Not only is it important to write about something that is personal and unique to you because it is morally right, but that is also how YOU will shine through...after all that's what the admissions committee is looking for, your personality. For example, my essay topic was extremely cliche, but I was so passionate about it, I went ahead a wrote on that topic. The essay turned out wonderfully, well written, and my true personality shined through...and it was successful. I think it was successful because my passion dripped from the page...not because the topic was wonderful. </p>
<p>I'm sorry if this seems mean and I apologize if you are clueless about essays and just need a start, but I just don't believe posting essays is what this board is for...I think it's risky and wrong. That being said, if you search the board, I'm sure you could find lists of topics that could prompt your thinking. Best of luck to you next year (I'm assuming you're a junior).</p>
<p>That's hilarious.</p>
<p>ummm, why would anyone reveal a really personal essay online in a random forum???</p>
<p>roflcopter</p>
<p>Alright, since obviously no one is going to post their essay, here's some advice to get you started, at least for the personal statement:</p>
<p>Obviously you're not going to be able to condense yourself into 500 words, and you shouldn't try. You know those questions people ask, "How would you sum yourself up with five adjectives?" If you had to give someone an idea of who you are with one activity or feeling you possess, what would it be? Then just write about it.
It's okay if you write a terrible first draft, that's what revision is for. My final personal statement was very different from what it started out as. The important thing is to just get down something, and then you can refine it to something that you'd want someone to read.</p>
<p>For the final essay:
1. Spellchecker is your friend.
2. Grammar is your friend, too, even if no one else likes him.
3. Take time to write it well, and make sure you read it for flow.
4. Have a friend or GC read it.
5. Try to enjoy it a bit...some of that might shine through to admissions officers.</p>
<p>Even if other people posted their essays, it wouldn't help you very much, I don't think. The essay's supposed to convey you, and only you. Just because something worked for someone else doesn't mean it's right for you. And good luck.</p>
<p>I would say don't over edit your essays, make sure they are real, ask yourself "Would I ever say something like this?"</p>
<p>I would like to add, don't start on it last minute. Give yourself atleast 2-3 months to be inspired and write. I started mine in August, during the summer before senior year.</p>
<p>My essay is shown below.</p>
<p>Punk'd!</p>
<p>nice essay... almost fell for it but no</p>
<p>I'm sure he got acceptance letters that looked like:</p>
<p>"Dear BLY,</p>
<p>Congratulations your acceptance to ___! Look below...</p>
<p>Psych! Go hang yourself!"</p>
<p>i have to agree with the people who commented in the beginning.. this was something really.. unintelligent and immoral to expect.</p>
<p>thx senioritis (haha.. =p) for posting the tips =)</p>
<p>why would i post my essay so people can copy it?</p>
<p>Hyar hyar. I scrapped my original essay on December 21st, then crunched out another just as deadlines hit.</p>
<p>here's my college application essay. copy it verbatim, word for word, for full effect.</p>
<p>It seems masochistic for a society to voluntarily deprive itself of reasonable access to sources of truth available through the accused perpetrators of crime. Because I agree with the values present in the Utah Law Reviews words, I affirm the resolution that states, In the United States judicial system, truth seeking ought to take precedence over privileged communication. In order to help clarify the application essay, I offer the following definitions: </p>
<p>Judicial System: Entire network of courts in a particular jurisdiction. The federal judicial system consists of the Supreme Court, Court of Appeals, District Courts, and specialized courts such as the Courts of Claims, Court of Customs and Patent Appeals, etc. (Blacks Law Dictionary) </p>
<p>Seeking: Truing to obtain, the act of searching for something, an attempt to acquire or gain something such as a fact of actuality. (Websters) </p>
<p>Precedence: The act or state of going before; adjustment of place. The right of being first placed in a certain order. (Blacks Law Dictionary) </p>
<p>Privileged Communication: Those statements made by certain persons within a protected relationship such as husband-wife, attorney-client, priest-penitent, and the like of which the law protects from forced disclosure on the witness stand at the option of the witness, client, penitent, spouse. The extent of the privilege is governed by state statutes. </p>
<p>Since the primary obligation of a government is to protect its citizens, my value premise is the fulfillment of governmental obligations. My criterion of a fair trial procedure is inherent to the resolution because it will save lives and ensure accurate court rulings. </p>
<p>As a brief overview I would like to clarify the distinction between privileged communication being a right or a privilege. According to findlaw.com, privilege is defined as something specially permitted or granted as a matter of discretion that may be limited or taken away. Technically, privileged communications is a privilege given to certain relationships by the government. (findlaw.com) Therefore, the affirmative is not limiting or taking away any rights, but merely a privilege, which does not limit the way in which we function within society. </p>
<p>The first affirmative justification states that the affirmative is more efficient in determining whether people are guilty or innocent in a court of the law. </p>
<p>If the affirmative always upholds the process of seeking the truth, without any hindrance from privileged communications, it will always decide on a much more accurate verdict than the negative. </p>
<p>As Professor Richard Burke observed, The only real obstacles to clearly stated rules requiring evidentiary truth and mandatory disclosure of all material facts, testimonials, or otherwise in both civil and criminal proceedings are the obstacles that we ourselves have erected protect us in what we are doing. In short, Professor Burke is stating that the only obstacle blocking us from a fair trial, with all evidence possible, is the same privilege that we created. The Wake Forest Law Review states, Better empirical evidence will help courts reach more accurate verdicts. As a consequence, it will aid both deserving patients and wrongly-accused physicians. If our expectations are realistic and the design pitfalls are avoided, then the increased use of empirical research would constitute an important improvement in malpractice adjudication. This quotation states that if the court is presented with more empirical evidence, which would be provided by the violation of privileged communications, the court would be allowed to obtain more accurate verdicts. </p>
<p>There are several implications: </p>
<p>1) By affirming the resolution, more innocent people will be declared innocent because of the more accurate trials that the affirmative provides. </p>
<p>2) However, by negating the resolution, some of the criminals that would have otherwise be put in jail would be set free because not all of the evidence was available to the court. </p>
<p>3) With these criminals free and innocent people in jail, regular citizens would be threatened by the crimes that these free criminals might commit in the future. </p>
<p>These impacts outweigh any claim to due process because the goal of due process is to ensure a fair trial procedure. Through these impacts I have shown you that the affirmative better maintains a fair trial than the negative. So therefore the harm that is created by taking away the right of due process is minimized because the goal of due process is better achieved through the affirmative. </p>
<p>The second affirmative justification states that if a court of law does not possess all evidence possible, it makes the due process system counter-intuitive. </p>
<p>A) Privileged communication is contrary to the purpose of due process. However, a trial cant be fair unless all pertinent evidence possible is available to the court. </p>
<p>The Utah Law Review states, The innocent find little solace in the right to remain silent and rely on the states inability to prove guilty without their cooperation. The guilty benefit from obstacles in the path to truth. This quotation is stating that the guilty profit from such processes as privileged communications. These privileged communications prevent the court from accessing the evidence that they need to make an accurate ruling in the trial. It is because of this lack of evidence that the court can not successfully convict the guilty person for his/her particular crime. It is because of this lack of evidence that it is impossible to call the trial fair, thus violating the right to due process. Also, the negative is upholding due process rights, but since the end goal of due process is to ensure a fair trial, if I prove that the negative cant guarantee a fair trial then the right to due process is unimportant. </p>
<p>B) Privileged communication is contradictory to the trial process. An example would be when a witness is being sworn to tell the truth about what he/she is asked. But when someone is bound by privileged communications then he/she cant answer the questions asked to their fullest capability. Once they hold back on a question, they are creating an unfair trial which violates the accused persons right to due process. </p>
<p>Through both of these situations, the right to due process is being violated. If either one of these situations were to occur, then it would make the court far less accurate at identifying who is innocent and who is guilty. When the accuracy of these trials is decreased, then the guilty would be able to benefit off of this lack of precision, so the court would not be able to convict against that person. With this criminal back in society, he/she would create a potential individuals to be harmed. </p>
<p>In conclusion, I have shown that through the negative due process is not always able to meet its end, which is a fair trial. Also I have shown that the due process procedure itself has a direct conflict to upholding the right to privilege communications. Thus, the negative is not able to either achieve due process through its ends or its means. </p>
<p>Send this to the adcoms. I guarantee they'll LOVE it. Especially the length.</p>
<p>lol... I got you guys point....Im a sophmore and sorry that I just dont have any idea on what even to write for my essay..
thanks everyone....I guess Ill just write something that I feel the most important to me</p>
<p>Ummm, wait you're a sophomore, why are you worried about your college essay now, breathe, experience life, i didn't look into my college essay until last october, and now I'm happy with where I'm going to college, so just wait it out, you'll probably want to change your essay anyway by the time you reach senior year.</p>
<p>thanks...I am a sophomore, (but I usually say on CC that I am a junior). Anyway, I am an US citizen living abroad for like 13 years. Right here in korea they dont need any like essays and stuff...so Im really unfamiliar with the system and dont know what to do.</p>
<p>try some books. like the one from harvard crimson. they have lots of harvard essays. that might get you a sense of how to write and how applicants share their ideas, emotions, thoughts, etc.</p>