Apply Texas essay Help PLEASE!!!!

College Essays
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Hey guys I am currently writing(starting to wite) essays for Apply Texas and I want to see if the idea im using is any good.
*Im applying for electrical engineering.

Essay A-
What was the environment in which you were raised? Describe your family, home, neighborhood or community, and explain how it has shaped you as a person.
ME-
I was raised in the suburb of Queens so I don’t have anything super interesting here but im thinking about writing about my daily experience with the crossing guard of my school who grew to become one of my friends. I’m thinking the personality trait i will emphasize on will be open mindedness.

B-
Most students have an identity, an interest, or a talent that defines them in an essential way. Tell us about yourself.
ME-
This is a weird one: I’m thinking about writing about me as a child riding the car to school everyday and just visualizing how the future would be and how i can bring upon change. That seems a bit silly so I might write one about being perplexed by everyday electronics as a kid.

C-
You’ve got a ticket in your hand—where will you go? What will you do? What will happen when you get there?
ME-
I really have no good idea about this one, but im thinking about writing about writing about time travel to travel back to the past to the point in time where Nikolai Tesla proved the safety of Alternating Current through his famous experiment where he shot current through his own body to produce light.

Are these any Good? Im applying to UT Austin, if I write these correctly do you guys think they will be sufficient for admission?

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No one has responded so I will give it my best shot. But take my opinion with a grain of salt because I just graduated from high school in June.

A and C have a lot of potential if you develop them a bit more. A sounded pretty unique until the part about “open mindedness.” What did you mean by that? C sounds like a cool idea but you need to put more of yourself into it. What will YOU do when you get there, and what will happen as a result? You have described an interesting setting, but you need to be the main character when you write the story.

I’m not sure about B because you need a way that these childhood experiences have impacted your character as a 17/18 y/o.

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As someone from Nassau County: I think that life in Queens is pretty different from life in Texas. I think you could do a great job with essay A. I like it better than the other options because it focuses on YOU and your impressions of people, as opposed to science.