Applying ED to one of the Claremont Schools, if anyone can provide feedback!

<p>Hi there,
The ED deadline is approaching now, and while I'm seemingly happy with my anectodal essay, I was wondering if anyone could possibly critique/provide feedback? I feel as though its missing a little bit of me describing myself and too much story. Any help would be tremendously appreciated, we all know how hard this is!
P.S, It's a funny essay, I promise you'll have an interesting read!</p>

<p>PM Me! </p>

<p>10Char</p>

<p>I will take a look. Let me know the prompt please.</p>