Apush Dbq- Please Help!!!

<p>I have been PANIC-STRICKEN since I have taken the test that I did poorly on the DBQ. The reason being, I had very general outside information- I just put the documents in context, I did not cite any specific outside info.</p>

<p>I am a very proficient writer and I believe my analysis was very appropriate, yet confined largely to the documents. I fully answered the question and used very sophisticated, scholarly prose throughout; all unified by a well-written thesis.</p>

<p>I utilized all but 2 documents, my analysis of them was not overly thorough but I used them to advance my argument and tied them in to the broader trends.</p>

<p>I talked aobut the general issues that the war brought up in each arena of American life, again, no mention of specific outside info.</p>

<p>Thesis: The Vietnam war served to exacerbate tensions in all arenas of American life: social, political, and economic. The war was costly in human life, ingnited debate over the role and scope of the federal government, and the military spending it promoted was deleterious to the economy, all served to arouse antagonism of citizens towards the government and each other.</p>

<p>For social, I said "opposition to the war grew increasingly conspicuous in society" but failed to mention specific examples such as the Kent State riots. I talked about the sentiment of the lower classes and them bearing a disproportionate amount of the burden through the draft . I also said many were angry that Americans were dying in a foreign war with no relevancey to national security. Also mentioned Ivy League draftees and whatnot.</p>

<p>Political: Talked about the Gulf of Tonkin and how it expanded executive power. Said that it drew resentment and protest of those who believe the governemt should be more limited in it's power, debate resembled Anti-federalits vs. federalists. War POwers act was the "legislative manifestation" of the sentiment that the war fostered in which Americans believed executive and thereby government power should be reduced.</p>

<p>Economic: WWII set a trend of enormous military spending, citizens became disillusioned with this policy when Vietnam pinched their pockets. Great Society "stymied" becaused of it and therefore the war also hurt lower classes who depended on Great Society economic reform and assitance, furthering the gap between lower and middle classes. </p>

<p>Like I said, little specific outside information but I did have analysis based on the broader trends of the era.</p>

<p>PLEASE I am begging someone to take the time to read through all of that and grade my essay. MUCHAS GRACIAS!!!</p>

<p>Come on CC'ers!</p>

<p>Honestly I think it's difficult for students to grade what people's scores should be. The people here are insanely smart so they're generally going to be fairly harsh considering their expectations. I've read some examples of the DBQs from previous years and I was shocked at how high their scores were. I felt like one only talked about the documents and it got a 9. Granted it did tie the docs together nicely but it felt like a Euro DBQ to me. In the end I think it's just best not to worry about it since there's nothing we can do about it now.</p>

<p>Ok, thank you very much. But my essay isn't terrible is it?</p>

<p>sounds great to me ..... solid thesis</p>

<p>It sounds like you shouldn't have a problem scoring somewhere above a 6, but I think an 8/9 would have a little more outside information. Probably somewhere around a 7. Maybe higher, maybe lower.</p>

<p>But that's just my opinion.</p>

<p>i just realized i was dumb and put in info about korea as part of the dbq. it was not a lot, but i mentioned macarthur and violating presidential directives for like 2 sentences. think that will penalize that much?</p>

<p>I doubt it. As long as you didn't go on and on about it and your essay doesn't hinge on it then you should be fine. They are trying to give you points, not take them away.</p>

<p>How do u think i would do if i included 7/9 documents, a TON of outside of information, but lacked a lot of analysis for the documents.</p>

<p>I embedded the documents into the essay, but i lacked a good analysis of the JFK one, the war powers act, and the poem. But i had so much good, specific outside information that was really relevant.</p>

<p>so what do u think? can i get a 6?</p>

<p>Wait, I'm confused...does outside information mean something that was not mentioned at all within the documents, or just facts that the documents didn't bring up?</p>

<p>In mine, I talked about the tet offensive, kent state shootings, detente, etc. so I'm fine; I was just wondering</p>

<p>Thanks guys!</p>