Attaching a resume of activities to the Cornell App

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<p>Dont write:
Junior Year:
-Blue Moon Band section leader
-Hospital Volunteering
Senior Year:
-Blue Moon Band Section Leader and First Alto
-Hospital Volunteering: recieved award for...</p>

<p>Write like:
Blue Moon Band (schools most advanced Jazz band), Grade 9-12:
-section leader (11-12)
-first alto (12)
Hospital Volunteering, Grade 10-12:
recieved special award for blah blah blahing.</p>

<p>that way you can consolidate multiple-year activities.</p>

<p>This also has better focus, because it emphasizes the activities themselves that you were doing rather than how many things you were doing at once.</p>

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<p>Yeah, that is the way to do it too. Also how many of your activities are one year things. Colleges like to see commitment, and if a lot of your activities are one year things then that can only hurt you. Also you said you had 5 senior year activities, are those all new? Because if they are that doesn't look especially good, colleges hate it when a student tries to add loads of activities in their senior year.</p>

<p>Look at what sparticus wrote, that is the "correct" way to be doing it. You are straight to the boing, and they understand the importance of the activity.</p>

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<p>You can probably only hurt yourself by sending in a laundry list to a school, and not only that, but an incredibly long and detailed laundry list, lol. Hopefully you can cut everything down to reasonable lengths.</p>

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<p>In your previous posts you refute our suggestions with evidence from the books you've read on how to write a resume, so I don't even get why you asked for advice in the first place. On job resumes people don't explain things in paragraphs, it's not necessary. Cornell will get the point from a simple sentence, long paragraphs would just **** me off if I had to read 24,000 of them, but that's just me ;).</p>

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<p>Ok...first its not a laundry list, and you are right. I should consolidate by putting in the activity and the years and positions held under it instead of dividing it up by grade. Im definitely not making up a laundry list. Its because i put for example wat sparticus did in the first example in bold. Thats exactly what i did. That made it much longer. Plus, i dont have new activities in senior yr....its funny how ppl rush to judge. All my activities r focused, consistent and strong. They all relate to one another. I asked for advice and i used it wisely by changing my resume a lot. Thanks again.</p>

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<p>I don't think I rushed to judge, I just think that a 130 word short essay about the Young Democrats is a bit overboard.</p>

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<p>ok...i cut that down though...the format of my essay is the problem that makes it so long...the format is as follows:
12th .....
. .....
.......
11th .......
.......
........
........
10th, etc</p>

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<p>ok lay off children, I think he's got it straight now haha. don't worry BK2nell, spanks is cranky...</p>

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<p>but wouldn't it be better to focus on the activities themselves and how you developed within each activity, rather than how each activity developed grouped by year?</p>

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<p>thats true...ur right...see...im flexible....im gonna change the resume a lot...see...all it takes is a rough draft, i guess this was just a rough draft of all my activities grouped by year...now i gotta make it look great and show not only my passion, but also my effort in perfecting it for the adcoms</p>

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<p>Question: Is this format presentable, concise and organized?</p>

<p>Activity | Years | Positions Held/Honors | Description</p>

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<p>yeah that looks more like the brag sheet that Katherine Cohen has in her book. Thats a much more user friendly format. Of course, you won't need descriptions for everything. Example: for the Young Democrats, all you need to say is regional founder, accomplished blabla. No need for a real description. ;)</p>

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<p>Film, you used her book too?</p>

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<p>oh, but of course.</p>

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<p>lol...was it really helpful for you?</p>

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<p>It helped me to realize some things, I suppose, but a lot that was in there seemed like common sense. There is also something slightly off putting about Katherine Cohen for me.</p>

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<p>OK...i redid my resume with the table format....meaning</p>

<p>Activity | Years | Positions | Description</p>

<p>It still comes out to around.....2.5 pages
Im thinking do i need hobbies? The hobbies i wrote were reading newspapers, newsmagazines, and watching documentaries.</p>

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<p>oK>....would anyone be willing to go over my resume...just check it out....i can email it to you...any Cornellians? please? suggestions...its 3 pages...much more organized...by activity now, not by year...its in table format</p>

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<p>you don't need to tell them them what tv shows you watch and what media you read.</p>

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<p>well wat if this is educational programming....and wat if newspapers r actually wat i do....isnt that a hobby?</p>