Bentley U common app question....PLEASE HELP!

<p>Ok, this is my response to the Bentley University Common App question of "Please discuss your interest in Bentley and the aspects of our community that will help you achieve your academic and personal goals" will my answer suffice? commentary and critique is appreciated!</p>

<p>As I am looking to in the future receive my MBA degree either in management or administration, I feel that a well accredited school such as Bentley University is a perfect match for me. Bentley's well acclaimed reputation and prime location allows it to have networks to many big businesses in and around the Boston area. With these types of resources Bentley provides for their students, there is not a doubt in my mind that I would be successful in the Bentley community. The atmosphere of being near a corporate supercenter such as Boston would be extremely beneficial to my education goals, and Bentley University is the school I have found to best utilize all that Boston, Waltham, and the surrounding areas have to offer. Bentley University gives it's students the tools to become business minded individuals and the tight knit community allows students to be around other students who have similar interests allowing for a challenging and competitive, but constructive and friendly atmosphere.</p>

<p>While it’s helpful to show that you know what advantages Bentley offers, I suspect the Bentley admissions folks want to know more about you. Why does this appeal to you? What <em>are</em> your goals? If, like many soon-to-be-freshman, your goals are pretty broad at this point (i.e., get a degree, get a good job), you may want to include how Bentley will help you identify and refine your goals.</p>

<p>And consider re-wording your opening sentence “As I am looking to in the future …” is very awkward to read.</p>