Boston University Common app supplement essay

<p>Essay Question: In an essay of no more than 500 words, please select the three words that describe you best and tell us how you will use these qualities/characteristics to contribute fully to the BU Community</p>

<p>Throughout my High School life I have suffered through many hardships and difficulties along the path to graduation. The first year of high school for me was very tough because I was a very shy kid and had trouble making the transition from middle school to high school. This transition was extremely difficult and greatly affected my academics during my freshman year. During my sophomore year I lost a close friend and was brought down immensely due to this tragedy. Even though it greatly affected me I still managed to drastically raise my gpa from freshman year. After sophomore year I decided to test my academic abilities by signing up to take two AP, two IB and two honors courses. Junior year was a hard transition from going from regular level classes to a rack of college level classes. I fought through the transition and never gave up even when I felt like transferring back to regular level classes. I was met with my toughest struggle yet during fall of my junior year due to the death of my grandfather whom had been my idol and a close friend. My junior year was extremely tough due to this loss but even through this I worked hard and found my comfort zone academically. Throughout these hardships and tragedies I managed to persevere and improve academically.</p>

<p>Expansive is another great word to describe me. I have always looked outwards to find out more to become more knowledgeable. I always seek to learn more and often in my classes in high school I have went beyond the regular coursework to find even more information about the topic at hand. I am very open with people and can help out others immensely when in need of help.</p>

<p>Whenever faced with a challenge I never gave 50 percent and gave it all I could. Assiduous is a word that definitely describes my personality. An example of when I was assiduous was during my sports practices, specifically rugby and wrestling. During these practices I would show a hard working attitude to try and encourage others to work just as hard as me to better the team. I take all my school work serious and when getting a bad grade I dedicate myself to work even harder next time to improve myself academically.</p>

<p>These qualities and characteristics of mine will help me contribute to the Boston University community in many ways. When I'm faced with challenges I will find the strength necessary to persevere and overcome those challenges. Being expansive will help further my knowledge and allow me to make an easier transition into college. If I am faced with a task to complete I will be hard working because I am assiduous in my work ethics. I can contribute to the BU community by joining the rugby team and bringing my hard work ethics to the team. My perseverance, expansive personality and assiduous work ethic will definitely allow me to contribute to the BU community.</p>

<p>I put this together today and its a rough draft but could anyone please help me out with any suggestions to add/edit to this?</p>

<p>One thing I would suggest is NOT to post this up.</p>

<p>People may come in and steal the essay and use it. Just ask people if they were willing to edit it for you and PM them your supplement. It may seem unlikely, but chances are still there that users will come and do the unthinkable.</p>

<p>By the way, I’m applying to Boston University, too.</p>

<p>Awesome! Maybe I’ll see you there. (:</p>

<p>the beginning seems a little “woe is me” and maybe you could change that by rewording it and keeping the emphasis on the words youre using to describe yourself</p>

<p>in the second paragraph an example would really improve your case</p>

<p>the third seems a lot like the first one</p>

<p>from what i read my overall impression is give me more of your personality not just stating generalizations and a few facts. theyre looking for who you are not just as a student but as a person</p>

<p>diction wise i would stay away from saying “academic comfort zone” because this could be mistaken for someone who slacked off and you already seem to be making excuses for poor academic performance</p>

<p>im not saying this to be offensive i identify with a lot of it and i know how it feels to have to work very hard just to keep up in school when life gets in the way</p>

<p>i think the biggest thing that would help your essay is to maybe combine the first and third paragraphs and end with a paragraph on who you are as a person… examples are you compassionate? you siad youre shy… are you still now in your senior year? are you committed to volunteer work? what about your sense of humor?</p>

<p>finally once you do go through and add some more substance polish polish polish! but with personality!</p>

<p>bring in extra curriculars and other activites too. youre not just your grades and numbers!</p>