Calling all critiquers

<p>hello =)</p>

<p>soo .. i wrote this short answer for one of my supplements .. but i feel like it just goes on and on and is way to long</p>

<p>and i need some help fixing it upp</p>

<p>soo .... would anyone be interested in helping me ? you have no idea how much i would appreciate it</p>

<p>just let me know and i shall PM it to you!</p>

<p>buuuuuuuuuuuummmmmmpp</p>