<p>Being the kid I am, I finished my essay already. I picked the find x one. I showed it to my parents and being my parents they loved it, but I was wondering if a current student at uchicago could proofread it for me and criticize it if possible. Thanks</p>
<p>I’m Class of 2014, so I’m not a current student yet per se, but I’d love to have a look. PM it to me.</p>
<p>I responded via PM.</p>
<p>I’m also co 2014, I’ll look at it :)</p>
<p>i’ll take a look at it!</p>
<p>Current student here, and I would be happy to read it when I’m bored at work. PM me if you’d like.</p>
<p>brucey I loved it!
Your writing style is very creative, and the ending was ingenious 
One comment I could make is that during the drive, focus more on the detail of the setting; I found some comments, such as the one about Christmas, to be slightly distracting.
Very refined essay overall!
Good luck bruceyy :)</p>