Can a current student please glance over my essay? Feedback would be helpful!

Colleges and Universities A-Z Carnegie Mellon University
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<p>Hi guys,</p>

<p>I have just finished a draft of my why CMU essay, and I was wondering if any current study would be willing to glance over it for two things:</p>

<p>1) Is is too cliche? Do I provide actual, unique reasons on why I would like attend CIT at CMU?
2) Does it flow smoothly?</p>

<p>Post here and I'll PM it to you. And, to avoid any conflicts/copying problems, please post only if you are a current student.</p>

<p>Thanks,
Wong</p>

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<p>No one feels like reading? :/</p>

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<p>I’m down to read it. But I don’t know how soon I can get it back to you.</p>

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<p>CompletelyKate reads essays-- you should try a PM to her. It’s last week of classes though…and then finals.</p>

<p>POPUP aren’t you a high school student?</p>

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<p>oh yeah my bad wongtong I didn’t read the title.</p>

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<p>I can read it, but not for a couple weeks. I’m about to die from work overload plus a fever. Send it my way and I’ll get to it when I can?</p>

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<p>Oh I wouldn’t want to burden you with an essay to read when you are sick. I’ll just send it when classes/finals are over. Thanks.</p>