Can any c u r r e n t student critique my essay please?

Colleges & Universities A-Z University of Illinois - Urbana-Champaign
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<p>It's only a 300words activities essay but I really need to write some good essays to make up for my weaker part of the transcript since my scores are not that great.
Can any current student please read it and critique it????plzzz?Z?Z?Z?Z?Z?Z?Z?ZZ?Z?Z?Z?Z</p>

<p>T h a n k y o u .</p>

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