can any one correct my essay ?

College Essays
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<p>These years almost every one in America likes doge. in fact, I don’t like dogs because they are messy and noisy. that what I was thinking about dogs but, when I came to America I see almost every one has dog .actually, I don’t know that much about dogs until I live with America family .they have a nice dog. Actually, that makes me to be interesting about dogs. So I learn from my American family about dogs three ways what is dog looks like, where lives are and what dog’s habits are.</p>

<p>First of all, dogs have many different looks. I think no one can count them .most dogs have tail in the back. Sometime they have long tail or short tail. Some dogs have long ears and some of them do not. Dogs have strong back more than many animals. Some dogs are really fast. dogs are almost looks like cats. I mean the body. Some dogs have big body .some dogs have body as cats which are small. Every animal have different look.</p>

<p>Second, dog have many different places to live. Most dogs live with family. They are friendly dogs. They can live with family. They will not hurt them, but some dogs they can not .they are really dangerous to live with family. Those dogs live in the forest or government talk them. Dogs have a lot of places to live.</p>

<p>Finally, every dog has many different habits. Even your children some time you can not know what they think. Dogs eat many different foods, such as meat, chicken, and there are many different stores sell dogs food. They have special foods for dogs. Also, dogs can drink many things .for example, water, milk, and some of them sip soda. Dogs like to play and run too .specially, dogs like to play with children, and children like to play with dogs too. Dogs have great habits, and dogs can be your best friend.</p>

<p>In conclusion, I had talk about dogs for three ways .first, what do dogs look like? Second, where. Do dogs live, and dog’s habits. What dogs like to do and what dogs don not like to do. Now I really like dogs .they have many different great things. Especially small dogs .they are very cute. I hope every one will have dog in future. They have many great things to be you best friend. I hope to buy small dog .it is will be good dog to have.</p>

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<p>You need to improve your english before going to an American college. I actually like that essay topic, but I just don't see any college accepting you with such poor english. Right now I'd say your writing as a 9 or 10 year would. Are there any classes you could take to help you with your english?</p>

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<p>ur english is off</p>

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<p>Honestly, your essay is quite corny. I understand that. I am also a bilingual. You know, it's good that you at least compose it up and put it in here so people would correct it for you.Well, I would strongly suggest that you should pay attention in the class and read the Holt Handbook more. Also, you should try the book named, "Everyday Uses." That book did a very good job in teaching you about the style for the essay. Besides the languages problem, I also see that you are talking about different topic in the same paragraph. Your second paragraph can be separated into several paragraph due to several ideas that you put. Well, pm me if you like to hear more. I have some undone business to attend.</p>

<p>Lily.</p>