<p>ok so I wrote this is 25 min.. I want you to plz grade it and tell me what you think of my intro cuz am planning to use it more often whenever i could... Thanks!</p>
<p>The prompt: "We do not take the time to determine right from wrong. Reflecting on the difference between right and wrong is hard work. It is much easier to follow the crowd going along with what is popular rather than risking the disapproval of others by voicing an objection of any kind."
Assignment: Is it always best to determine one's own views of right and wrong, or can we benefit from following the crowd?</p>
<p>My essay:
Every human being on Earth has a certain goal. It is in our blood; we are bound to set objectives because it gives us a sense of significance, of existance. In turn, our lives in turn are nothing but rigorous courses to our goals, and it is the choices we make along that path that define who we are. Whether we make those choices on personal beliefs and principles or just to "go with the flow" or "follow the crowd" also defines our success from failure. Indeed, it has been constantly proven throughout History, Literature, and even our contemporary life that traversing that "Road Not Taken", like Robert Frost put it, is the sure route to success.</p>
<p>I once read that "you cannot transform a sheep into man by making it stand on its hind legs, but by making a herd of sheep stand on their hind legs, you can make a group of men!" and I didn't understand this statement until I read about how Hitler, the dictator of all time, made the "Black Shirts", his "people". He used what every advertising campaign uses, the general appeal because humans are inclined to go by what's popular instead of what's right. Hitler used that those people needed security, and that everlasting need to belong, against them. Basically, he convinced them that they were all "one" going after the same goal, following their leader's commands, a leader who in turn satisfied their lust for power and significance. And indeed it worked! Hitler was eventually successful to transform so many young adults into advocates of his "cause" that he moved from the "ex-con" who just got out of prison to the leader of the World in no time! True, that the World then had to suffer for years to come, but it was all because of the human vice to "be lead", to go with the fad. We give our oppressors the reason for their dictocracy simply because we are too afraid to stand alone.</p>
<p>Indeed, that need for security has led us to many failures thereafter, ending with the so-called "Arab Spring", the series of revolutions the Arab people have started against their arbitrary governments, but at what cost! The Arab spouse are now paying for their anscestor's missteps. It was that need for security from the people that led the leaders to put themselves in the positions of Gods just because the people were too cowardly to take a stand, because everyone was afraid of failing alone that they never said "No" to despair because the leaders brainwashed to think that "NO" means be left alone. And no one wants to be left alone do they?!</p>
<p>"Be the change you wish to see in the World" said Gandhi (a figure who is highly respected and who gained eternal life in the hearts of many just because he had the couarge to stand alone in the face of injustice and convince others to do so too).Indeed! It is your courage to stand by what you believe in, no matter it what may seem, that guarantees you success.</p>
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I like your conclusion but I think you can improve it by saying like you can rely on your own conscience to make the link between the thesis and the conclusion stronger. Hope my advice helps.</p>