Can ANYONE help me cut and improve my overcoming hardship/"awareness" essay for UCs!?

<p>HELP ME!!!!!!!!! I'll PM you. It's too long right now and kind of lacking in focus, I feel, plus, I've just been made aware that it sounds really negative!! </p>

<p>AHHHHHHH!!!!!!! HELP! I don't know what the UCs are looking for!</p>

<p>I can give it a look, but I’m short on PM-posts, lol… you can PM it to me and I’ll reply here, or email me your email address with spaces in it xD</p>