Can anyone pls grade my SAT essay?

<p>Assignment:- Is the world changing for better?</p>

<p>Humans are given the moral responsibility of developing and changing the society in which they live. The first change was the discovery of fire. Fire kept our ancestors safe and warm. Fire also had many other benefits, the ‘same’ fire was used to transform a beautiful city into ashes in the 19th century.
Human has a curious mind. It always wants to improve the current standard of living. The price paid for such improvement is HUGE. Mikhail Klashinikov, inventor of the Assualt Rifle – AK-47, developed it with the sole reason to help the Russian army. He never would have thought, in his wildest dreams, that his invention would become the favourite assault rifle for the mavericks. The Russian army indeed got a rifle which was ‘all-weather’ but the insurgents also had a piece of the pie. The world of artillery indeed witnessed a revolution but not for good.
John Oppenheimer, inverntor of atom bomb, publicaly announced that he had committed a mistake in inventing such a lethal weapon. The memories of tragedies in the nuclear industry is still afresh. The Chernobyl Plant Disaster, The Bhopal Gas Tragedy, Fukushima Plant woes etc. The list is long but the message is clear. Nuclear industry’s evolution did change the world, making it worse.
The scientific breakthrough is laudable, but was used to creat havoc rather than peace, chaos rather than order. The invention of Colt’s revolving gun created a new kind of criminals :- Bandits and dacoits.
The history has been evident that the world has indeed changed but not for better. I therefore agree with the author in his claim. Friends, it doesn’t matter what powers or abilities you have, the only thing that matters is the choice you make. Humans , in 90% of instances, have made wrong choice. </p>

<p>4, no primary focus.</p>

<p>I don’t really know an exact grading scale, but I can give suggestions. Like the person above me said, there is no primary focus. I think that if you choose one example and elaborate on that the entire essay, it won’t seem as disorganized. Try to pick a topic you know a lot about and bend it to your liking to fit the prompt. I think a lot of it is also that you are great at listing facts, which would be really useful if this were a history essay, but you don’t really go into detail on how these facts relate. </p>