Can anyone read over my personal essay for commonapp?

<p>Hi~ My topic isn't the most creative, I wrote about my favorite extracurricular. The other topic would've been how I moved here from a different continent when I was five but I don't remember too much about that and I felt that writing about my favorite extracurricular would've been more interesting anyway...</p>

<p>If it matters, I'm applying Washington University in St. Louis, Northwestern, UIUC, Boston University, Rochester, NYU, UCLA, maybe Cornell/UPenn if I'm feeling lucky.</p>

<p>So does anyone have time to skim it over and tell me any strengths and weaknesses or any critiques in general? Thanks :)</p>

<p>I think I did prompt 6; the topic of your choice one. Thanks!</p>

<p>Hello! I would be happy to read it. Please PM me :).</p>

<p>I’ll read it and give feedback. PM me.</p>

<p>Thank you to both of you! :)</p>

<p>send it over!</p>

<p>PM it to me.</p>

<p>I’d happy to help:) send it over please</p>

<p>Pm it to me!</p>