Can anyone review my Rutgers essay?

College Essays
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<p>I need a critical review of my essay for Rutgers. the prompt: </p>

<p>Rutgers University is a vibrant community of people with a wide variety of backgrounds and experiences. How would you benefit from and contribute to such an environment? Consider variables such as your talents, travels, leadership activities, volunteer services, and cultural experiences. Only personal essays submitted via our website will be considered. You may enter a maximum of 4000 characters including spaces. </p>

<p>The deadline is Nov 1 so I really need this review. Thank You!</p>

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<p>bump 10 char :(</p>

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<p>anyone want to critique it?</p>

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<p>i will read it if you can review mine in return.</p>

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<p>nty. bump anyone?</p>

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<p>bumppppppp</p>