Can I send someone my essay for some tips?

<p>So... I just "finished" my first essay for college apps.
The topic was:
Evaluate a significant experience.... and its impact on you.</p>

<p>Is it normal to feel like you just wrote a really bad essay on the first college essay you've written?
I feel like mine doesn't really, hmm, flow very well?
I dunno how to describe it. </p>

<p>If you wouldn't mind critiquing my essay, please let me know! :)</p>

<p>thanks!</p>

<p>Mikeypz - hopefully you’re having some teachers or mentors that you KNOW read this…anyone can login to CC…</p>

<p>I’d be happy to look at it; PM me.</p>

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<p>True, but naive. Yes, internet advice should always be taken with a grain of salt, especially on sites like CC where people will make ridiculous claims like “you have a 90% chance of getting into Harvard!@!@!” That said, it’s important to have somebody who does not know you well read your essay to make sure that (1) it makes sense; and (2) they can get an idea of your personality from your essay.</p>

<p>sure thing pm me for an honest assesment</p>

<p>Pm me if YOU want…I’m still in high school but I’m a decent writer. I’ll look over it and critique as best I can. If you’d rather not have me look it over, that makes sense too :)</p>

<p>@capenn, I haven’t sent any to teachers… YET. But I will! </p>

<p>@others, thanks guys!</p>

<p>I would also like to take a look. I’m sure it’s not as bad you say</p>