Can somebody plz read my uc essay and give me some pointers

<p>Hey so i would really appreciate for some feedback on my essay for the uc prompt #2
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
thanks:)</p>

<p>I'll read it.</p>

<p>hey can someone plz read my essay and give me some feedback! thanks:)</p>

<p>I'll give it a read.</p>