<p>The essay needs major revising. First and foremost, it is FAR too long. UIUC requires it to be limited to approximately 300 words; yours is 772 words long. Other major points that need be dealt with:</p>
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<li><p>You should not restate the prompt in any way in your essay (e.g. "Obviously that’s what the question aks for"). This is a waste of space as the adcoms already know what they require you to write about.</p></li>
<li><p>You should not address the reader directly (e.g. "I thank you for the time you spent"). Try to limit the use of the word "you" as much as possible.</p></li>
<li><p>Delete all sentences that do not have anything to do with the topic at hand (your interests and accomplishments). E.g. "I admit that this must be about the fifth or sixth time I have written this essay"</p></li>
<li><p>"The person writing all those other essays was a me who was solely aimed at trying to impress you, well this time I was just me, plain old me." This is absolutely the wrong attitude to have. You are hurting your chances of admission with phrases like "I admit that I did procrastinate" and "Right now I can’t think of too many accomplishments." The essay should be written in a manner that shows that you are a unique individual with qualities that make you worthy of attending a top university. You say in your essay that you think this is "exaggeration." This is the way it is supposed to be written. ALL college essays are about showing the college admissions officials that you are intelligent and unique, NOT that you are just "plain, old you." Your modesty here is detrimental. I am not saying you should lie about your accomplishments, but that you should not be showing yourself in a negative manner. There may be something that you can talk about here instead of just saying that you do not have any accomplishments that are noteworthy. If there isn't, then focus more on interests than accomplishments. Just don't bluntly state that you have no accomplishments. It's equivalent to saying "Don't admit me."</p></li>
<li><p>When the prompt instructs you to write about your interests, it does not mean you should make a list of your favorites. Video games and sports should not be mentioned at all. Books and movies might have a place in the essay, but if and only if they were significant enough that they have substantially impacted your life or your way of thinking in some way. Also make sure that they are intellectual in some way. In my opinion, Harry Potter and Star Wars qualify more as entertainment for the masses than works that might change your life. What you should be doing here is talking about music, sports, or any hobbies that show talent and commitment. Note that when I say music, I mean insturments that you play, not your favorite bands; The same goes for sports; talk about how you have devoted a substatial amount of time playing in a school sport. Even if you haven't done these sort of things, you can still talk about a deep interest in, for example, politics, science, literature, and etc. Just make sure that it shows you as someone with intellectual curiosity, not someone who likes the same things as everyone else (e.g. movies, popular books, sports teams).</p></li>
<li><p>"but I have worked at my local hospital for a little over an year now, and I definitely can say that helping out gives me a sense of pride and I could ask for no better reward." I like this sentence. A lot. Your whole essay should be more like this sentence. Also, it most certainly qualifies as an accomplishment that you can talk about.</p></li>
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<p>I hope you were not offended by any of my criticisms; they were intended solely to help you. Regarding your chances, your ACT score is at the 25th percentile for admitted freshmen and your GPA indicates that your class rank may be low as well. This means that your numbers alone give you a low chance of admission and you will have to rely on a well written essay and good list of extracurricular activities to gain admission. You can send any of the 3 ACT scores because UIUC will only look at the composite score, I believe. But of the 3, the last one has the highest section scores and would be the one I would choose just in case they do look at them.</p>