<p>It still needs a lot changed/added (especially at the beginning and end), so I'd be super grateful for advice in that vein. Also, opinions on whether or not it seems too hard on my current school? I tried to get across that my dissatisfactions are a result of circumstances outside of the control of the school, but I can't tell whether it comes across.</p>
<p>Space may be the most familiar final frontier, but I would argue that it is truthfully just one of three: space, the ocean, and the brain. I applied to Bard initially with the intent to major in Psychology, but from my decision to attend, up until now, it has become increasingly apparent to me that Neuroscience and Marine Biology, and particularly a combination of the two in the study of cephalopod intelligence, are my stronger interests by far.
Transferring from Bard, I will be sad to leave some fantastic courses, professors, as well as opportunities for original research both on and off campus. However, a number of unfortunate circumstances (namely, the simultaneous resignation of a significant portion of the Biology department, as well as an unprecedentedly large number of incoming Biology majors making it extraordinarily difficult to grab one of the very limited seats in the available courses) have prompted me to look elsewhere for the continuation of my college career.
Bards picturesque location certainly played a role in my decision to attend. And while I have not been disappointed by the beauty or energy of the campus itself, the surrounding area leaves some to be desired. Having lived just outside Charlottesville, Virginia for the entirety of my pre-college life, I grew up knowing and loving the college town feel, and I find myself missing it greatly. Any campus can seem stifling when its location renders it next-to inescapable, and I hope to avert this in an urban or suburban environment.</p>