Can someone critique my essay?

<p>I wont post it here. Please do post saying that you are willing to read, and I will PM it.
The prompt is:
Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?</p>

<p>Sure thing!</p>

<p>Ill critique</p>

<p>Dont worry about it , i decided to rewrite it using a different prompt .</p>