Can someone critique this Harvard essay?

College Essays
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<p>Just want some thoughts on CC about it. Be completely honest.</p>

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<p>well, where is it?</p>

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<p>Yes, I’ll read your essay. Email the essay along with the prompt to <a href="mailto:four.years@yahoo.com">four.years@yahoo.com</a> I’m a grammar buff, a teacher, and a former copywriter.</p>

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<p>what kind of critique you want from people though, constructive? formal? advice on some aspects of it? send it to <a href="mailto:pers77@live.com">pers77@live.com</a></p>

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<p>I emailed it to both of you who requested it through email.</p>

<p>Any thoughts/advice/improvements would be appreciated.</p>

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<p>ill look over it as well</p>

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<p>I’ll be happy to help out as well. PM me.</p>

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<p>pm me and i’ll read it critique it, etc.</p>

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<p>sure, PM to me. :)</p>

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<p>sure, PM to me as well.</p>

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<p>pm it over, i would love to critique it : )</p>

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<p>you could pm me or reach me at <a href="mailto:imn3ilhuru@aim.com">imn3ilhuru@aim.com</a>
the latter would be more easier xD</p>

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<p>Yeah, I would love to see it. E-mail it to <a href="mailto:mickeymousedisneyworld08■■■■■■.com">mickeymousedisneyworld08■■■■■■.com</a></p>

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<p>i want to read it. Please email it to <a href="mailto:mathkid95@gmail.com">mathkid95@gmail.com</a></p>

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<p>i’ll gladly take a look at it; pm me.</p>

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<p>PM me, I will respond within 24 hours</p>

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<p>PM me ill help</p>

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<p>If you still need it, I’d be glad to help.</p>

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<p>I’ll read it too, and reply.</p>

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<p>Sure! PM me</p>