Can someone give me any suggestions on my essay? Really thanx~

<p>Can anyone read my essay and give me any suggestions~? thanks so much~^_^</p>

<p>PS. Early results will come out soon. Wish everybody good luck~!</p>

<p>i’d be glad to help</p>

<p>I could help you.</p>

<p>thanks so much~anybody else can be so kind and help me~?</p>

<p>2days–>early results~good luck to everyone~</p>

<p>email it to me :)</p>

<p>thanks cuRRent~help still needed…anyone else can help? really thanks!</p>

<p>Sure I can look if you still need some help</p>